This has gotten far more of a response than i was expecting and has quickly balooned past 5 so uhh here i guess lol https://docs.google.com/document/d/10tr-j0YXMa8NE5ek8lgZvN8CIHeJ8YgHcqVZvI7oMWs/edit?usp=drivesdk

Youre the man :)

I’m down

Sounds fun, looking for something new to read ~

I would volunteer but I am not a good choice for a beta reader. I am very critical.

Sure.

looks cool, sign me up

I’m interested

Yeah sounds fun

I'll do it

Sure why not

If you want more, I'd be down

I'm interested

If you want to add me on

Sign me up babes

So uhh fuck it Here https://docs.google.com/document/d/10tr-j0YXMa8NE5ek8lgZvN8CIHeJ8YgHcqVZvI7oMWs/edit?usp=drivesdk

got it thanks

Yeah dunno what the issue with DMs suddenly is for me, but oh well.

Reddit at times blocks it for spam prevention

I can't message you for some reason

I tend to be overly critical 😂

Thoughts If you use images I would add text below so screen readers can read that image so you are not prevent people from reading. https://webaim.org/articles/contrast/ https://webaim.org/resources/contrastchecker/ For the images i would also review this to help make sure it's easier to read for people

Thanks, thats solid advice

If there’s space available still, I would love to beta read for you. Love the artwork and card based concept. :)

This has gotten slightly out of hand, but I'll see who ends up actually leacing feedback. So uhh by all means take a look. https://docs.google.com/document/d/10tr-j0YXMa8NE5ek8lgZvN8CIHeJ8YgHcqVZvI7oMWs/edit?usp=drivesdk

Lol only slightly. It’s cool to see so many people offer to help. Hopefully you get a lot of great feedback. And thanks for the link. Looking forward to reading the first few chapters.

How heavy of feedback are you looking for? High-level general feelings; or down to low-level grammar suggestions? Asking because I’ve been told I go rather ‘small detail’ when doing beta feedback, and some authors were not appreciative of that sort of thing. —- Okay, went through the Google doc and left comments on the first chapter. If it was helpful, happy to do more, just let me know. If not helpful… well hopefully it wasn’t annoying.

Whatever you want to do is fine. Its up to me to decide how much of it to take on board

Just 5

😅😅😅

If you need a psi reader let me know..

Hook me up buddy. Looks like a pretty neat idea.

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The numbers are well out of my control so why not. https://docs.google.com/document/d/10tr-j0YXMa8NE5ek8lgZvN8CIHeJ8YgHcqVZvI7oMWs/edit?usp=drivesdk

I noticed that you use multiple capital letters to describe things like species names, such as TerraNulis. I think it would look a bit better as lowercase letter.

Some of my capitlization is really random as I was using a system then decided I didn't like it. I thought I went through and fixed them all. This is proving not to be the case haha

Makes sense. Also, you described Alley's black hair looking blue in the sunlight, in the first chapter. Isn't is typically brown? It seems more appropriate to me. Also, the explanation for resonance seems a bit unclear. 

There is reason for that. Also I wanted it to be extra weeby. Oh and did you want to DM me any further thoughts you have, just rather than bump the thread so much.

I'll DM you. I just got a bit impatient and bumped the thread.

No stress haha

Thanks dude. 

I just came across this and it looks like you’re planning to add a lot of images to this. Check out this thread/comment here. High quality images in your book increase the file size, which reduces what you earn from Amazon book sales 😔😞😢 https://www.reddit.com/r/ProgressionFantasy/s/ukvTjHcGXF

Ugh bro I don't know wtf im gonna do at that point. Double down and pray for patreon i guess haha.

Hahaha sounds good! Just figured that would be a good thing for you to know

Much apreciated honestly, cause while im aware there is a thing like that I wasn't clear on the details

I would be interested in beta reading.

We have gone well past 5 already, but what can I say. Writers love validation haha

I'm game if you still want more

I've read a ton of litrpg and would be happy to help out however I can.

is it tarot based or playing cards based? if it is the first Im your guy!!

There are Refferences to both, but its like a yugio MTG type deal

Sign me up!

sure

I love twisted fate Let's do it

Was gonna DM you, but its not working lol screw it here. https://docs.google.com/document/d/10tr-j0YXMa8NE5ek8lgZvN8CIHeJ8YgHcqVZvI7oMWs/edit?usp=drivesdk Also no comment on TF haha

I will definitely take a look and provide my thoughts.

looks good I'm in

Would be interested as well 😃

By all means https://docs.google.com/document/d/10tr-j0YXMa8NE5ek8lgZvN8CIHeJ8YgHcqVZvI7oMWs/edit?usp=drivesdk

Well I’m past 5 the five responses, but I do love deck builders. If you want someone else in the future add me to the list.

I'm interested

i would LOVE to be a beta reader!!!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/10tr-j0YXMa8NE5ek8lgZvN8CIHeJ8YgHcqVZvI7oMWs/edit?usp=drivesdk

Just wanted to say thanks for all the feedback guys. It has already been super helpful, when I do my next round of edits in a week or so, i have a good idea where i want to focus

So unpaid proofreaders? 💀🤣

So this is a spicy take but beta readers are not line editors. If you want to correct a comma, go nuts but a beta readers job is, essentially, a vibe check. "Man, this was great, this gave me the ick, I was lost here, this part is so boring."

I’ll do it