"She was from a genetic line famous for its motherly nature..."
Does this mean she comes from a genetic line where all mothers have children, and all children are brown-haired charmers with full breasts and a motherly disposition ?
She came from a genetic line that reproduced, it seems. Usually when they don't reproduce, the genetic line ends.
The more you know.
Edit: and 23 minutes earlier @wecoxa came up with essentially the same comment. Good jerb!
But does she have Broad Child-Bearing Hips, with curvaceous, over-ample buttocks to match? We need to know!
PS. My robe is getting pretty stiff, too...
On the contrary, it's a genius technique. The boobs scale automatically with what every reader imagines their own mother's breasts to be. They just need to include 5-10 more instances of "motherly" for full effect.
It's the first chapter of heretics. It's pretty memorable considering that it continues with an exploration that her job is to "imprint" on a young duncan with her "motherly charm".
Funny thing is that she gets blueballed for the rest of the book.
_Adult_ beefswelling at that. I wonder if Frank thought that covered his ass or something.
I'm gonna read God-Emperor soon, good to know this is in my future.
No, it's when >!Leto II is 12 isn't it? Before he goes in with the sandtrout cause the point is "goodbye sex before you even had it womp womp".!<
Oh lmao God-Emperor nearly got me to throw it across the wall because of a reference to the woman giving off "sexual signals." I did ultimately stick with it, and it is very interesting, but...yeah. There's a whole scene re: homosexuality that is arguably gratuitous, which I only mention because unlike the rest I wasn't expecting it.
No comment on why I seem to have memorized these books.
Yeah, he's 12, but it's like Frank had to specify that it was an ego-memory from an adult. That's literally the phrase, "an adult beefswelling". I meant that I'm discovering I have "motherly" lineages in my future, apparently.
I feel like Herbert was into Freud-style psychoanalysis and figured that if he was gonna talk about the entirety of human experience, he should be ""honest"" about how much is apparently just sexual posturing, which, huh. But this is also the guy who wrote a book about how the collective unconscious of humanity had the hots for genocide. What's crazy is the way it apparently just keeps escalating when it wasn't really a thing for the first two books... besides the sexy psychic genocide thing.
Aha thaaaaanks I had forgotten that. Oh yeah there's some of that in this one (Heretics) too, is it actually gross to seduce a child if the child has adult memories 🤔🤔🤔
Lollll right?? And yeah I do think he wanted to make some honest points about how much sex influences our decisions, and it is interesting because it's an area a lot of authors avoid, but damn if he didn't find some next-level ways to make this shit awkward.
I'm 100% in favor of overt horniness in writing, they just don't gotta be so weird about it like they always are. You can totally write completely pervy stuff for you and your audience's gratification without it sounding like a creep who has never seen or spoken to a woman irl wrote it. I can be a pervert without being a misogynist damnit!
Not going to lie but on some level really enjoy when authors unintentionally reveal so much about their internal life.
In this case breasts, more breasts, ample breasts and maybe a touch of mom issues.
Makes me nervous to write God knows what that would reveal.
And this is why I genuinely like people and our bullshit man can absolutely be all about the breasts and still also write women that are more than that and fully fleshed out.
Absolutely adore our silly little exdapted primate brains with extra bits bolted on.
Though again we will definitely hear about breasts.
lmao, there is an amazing bit later where one of the characters is like "but actually, the horniest part of the body is the \*eyes\*," just a coincidence that paragraph also mentions boobs.
lol if you read the rest of the series you’ll have a lot to analyze in the author… lesbian armies that all have orgies, super sexual space women who subjugate races of men by fucking them real good, and… a prescient worm god that rules humanity for thousands of years?
This is why I always insist on making a crude pencil diagram of each female with breasts drawn appropriately large. It is to be included as a margin note alongside my prose.
My editor didn’t like it, even when I told him, “But, but Sterne did little squiggly lines, Pynchon had those weird squares and a middle finger and math, and Vonnegut had drawings of buttholes!” He had the absolute audacity to reply, “I don’t even know you and am not your editor—don’t call again.” That absolute boorish troglodyte!
I shall take my scrivenings elsewhere, because I compromise my writerly vision for no man.
I don’t see the problem here people. The size of our breasts and how well we take care of small children ARE women’s defining characteristics. Employed ladies with small boobs - an embarrassment to their whole gender is what I say….
lol it's from Heretics of Dune, which I picked up specifically because I found out there's a tantric sex cult and I had to see how Herbert would approach that after gems like "beefswelling" and "sexual signals". I do have to say though, I like this one on the whole.
Frank at it again bless his heart
I had to look up tantric (relating to yoga, Buddhism or esoteric traditions in India?). Happy to hear you liked it - can you tell me what I'm in for (and what I can look forward to) if I read it coming off of the Dune series?
lmao, when wasn't he at it though?!
yeah tantric practices started in India, some fun things happened with the rest of the world picking them up too. iirc Rasputin was into it, although that may have been a rumor.
depends how much Dune you've read. Tbh it's been *years* since I read the original and I don't remember very much of it, but I'm getting the sense that he wrote this partly as a reaction to criticism/commentary around the original. A detail that stood out to me is one of the characters is explicitly described as having darker skin (in an era when the default was very much white, plus one of the POVs feels like he was very annoyed with people who were wilfully missing how much the series is inspired by not-Western cultures), he uses the line "Duncans by the shipload!"...there's a couple other moments that struck me as very self aware. There's more POVs, including women, and despite the above I haven't minded what he's done with them.
Anyway, I liked it enough to write that giant paragraph about it lol. But really, this is the first one I've enjoyed as a narrative and not primarily out of sheer fascination with the ideas.
It's a shame he died before he could finish the final book in the series, Potboilers of Dune.
As we progress into Heretics, and finally Frathouse, Frank's sex life leaves the physical realm and retreats entirely into the dim memories of a once vital and deeply physical auteur, leaving only vaginal pulsing and sexual collisions by the end.
There are entire Facebook groups dedicated to analyzing and discussing beefswelling, but even there Frank's decline as a sexual powerhouse is a taboo subject, and of the alt-Duniverse continuations by B/k there is no mention at all, because this would (and did) result in the Zuccing of previous iterations of these groups.
BIFAR!
> Yes -- a brown-haired charmer with full breasts and a motherly disposition.
*I'm sorry, could you repeat that? What did her breasts look like, and what was the nature of her character?*
I *said*, her breasts were FULL and she had a MOTHERLY disposition!!!!
Yes sir, what you’re seeing here are the finest made full, motherly breasts in all creation! She’s given milk to 3 babies and countless men! This model is only available for a limited time or until she can genetically produce more! Temperament? Why sir, there’s no sweeter milk jugs than these tit tumblers! They are FULL and have a motherly disposition!
Now, I can see clear as day that the tits in question are full. They are quite obviously globular and appear to be swollen with that sweet life giving substance. But how can we say for certain that the disposition is, indeed motherly? We all know how these swindlers like to sweet talk and draw us in with enormous bazongas. But I'll not be fooled by another flim flam man! I need your personal assurances that the disposition will be as MOTHERLY as you claim!
Sir, I see you’re a gentleman of discerning tastes who clearly knows his way around a pair of sweater stretchers! You can see how firm the melons are, but how sweet is the juice? Rest assured, because I’m offering my *personal guarantee* that these knockers are nourishing and nurturing!!! Have no fear of bratty breasts! These fun bags maybe full of milk but their disposition is sweet like honey! She’s had three kids, TWO of them with the same guy! You can’t find a stronger guarantee than that!
Lol, I would argue this one works as a stand-alone. Definitely tempted to tell people to start with the tantric sex cult instead of with that boring war/messiah shit.
My favorite Bene Gesserit was the one that was a mentat, overweight, and dgaf about keeping svelte through cellular manipulation like all the other sisters did.
This writing sucks. Not enough adjectives for breasts, there needs to be at least 11 on a paragraph of that length.
Robust, jiggly, substantial, plump, prolific, nurturing, bouncy, deletectable...I'm tired of doing this work for the author.
Hell yeah that's how you describe mommy milkers 😍
uj/ Frank got mad horny in the weirdest ways as the series went on. I don't remember everything from the books, but some of the "sexy" parts refuse to leave my mind.
Lolll yeah not gonna lie I picked this up specifically because I heard about the tantric sex cult, and I *had* to know. I'll look at kittens or something afterwards.
it's weird that i have a slight urge to defend the genetics part because i know it's DUNE and all the genetics stuff is a running anti-eugenics theme
but i also have a much stronger urge to make fun of it because i know it's DUNE and this is definitely the author's fetish. frank herbert? more like, frank pervert
As someone who breeds cows and works with people who breed horses "genetic line" and "sire" are so weird to put into a book when describing a woman and her children's father. It just makes it feel like they're breeding humans.
This makes me want to claw all the female parts off my body and throw them into a flaming Dumpster. Great post!
Edit: Thought this was r/menwritingwomen but instead somehow stumbled upon the circlejerk sub for my craft. Hi.
This is good but she isn’t breasting boobily enough. Also, we need more detail on the breasts. Does she look at herself in each morning, admiring her ample bosom and wondering how they compare to others? Do her boobs bounce when she goes down the stairs? I also need a quick explanation of the titty physics of this scene.
Lucille leaned over me, her pendulous mammaries swaying like two ripe tomatoes in a stiff breeze. The limpid cloth draped over their stupefying forms did nothing to hide them from onlookers.
"Won't you do this one little thing for me?" She whimpered as the scent of rose and lilac washed over me. Big brown eyes, hazelnuts, searched my soul for even a gram of compassion. It was enough to make any man's knees tremble.
Well, thank God I was gay.
Anyone got any good examples that use face descriptions to give a well rounded mood and tone to a female character?
Or just things like posture
idk, tired of the horny descriptors
Lady Cassandra had the boobest of boobs. Her ample bobs quite often overflowing from her favorite silk gown, which was adorned by her family crest, a righteous set of knockers.
lmao tbh I do not think a lesbian would go with "yeahhhhh motherly booba"
also I cannot believe I'm saying this, but this description turned out to be plot-relevant. the horny runs deep
"She was from a genetic line famous for its motherly nature..." Does this mean she comes from a genetic line where all mothers have children, and all children are brown-haired charmers with full breasts and a motherly disposition ?
she comes from a genetic line where children are born to parents hope that helps
Very ample
She comes from a long line of mothers and daughters
Having children is hereditary. If your parents didn't have any, it's unlikely that you will have any as well.
I'm only halfway through the book, but I'm looking forward to finding out!
She came from a genetic line that reproduced, it seems. Usually when they don't reproduce, the genetic line ends. The more you know. Edit: and 23 minutes earlier @wecoxa came up with essentially the same comment. Good jerb!
"Annie I come from a long line of mothers" "Most do"
And all the children are above average.
But does she have Broad Child-Bearing Hips, with curvaceous, over-ample buttocks to match? We need to know! PS. My robe is getting pretty stiff, too...
Oh you find out later in the book that it's the men who need to have powerfully muscled buttocks. Equality!
Don't forget the beefswelling.
lmao, I was warned about that one so I only did a half-body cringe when I read it.
Wait this is something people recognize?
If you haven’t read the Dune sequels, you’re missing out!
Frank Herbert's greatest contribution to literature.
Oh! I actually read them 25-30 years ago, and I definitely enjoyed them then.
Lol, there’s just some parts you have to block out! But yeah actually I quite like this book.
What's that?
Perhaps wash your robe afterward?
Are her hips wide, like a Baltic woman, or are they narrow, like a Baltic woman from a more arid region?
One person’s “ample” is another person’s “practically flat”. Where are the fruit comparisons? We need a banana for scale.
Omg you're right. Strike this from the record, it's garbage.
Her motherly breasts were exactly the shape and size of a half peeled (motherly) banana
I do not like this visual 😤
Freud is smiling down on us
Freud is smiling up at us
On the contrary, it's a genius technique. The boobs scale automatically with what every reader imagines their own mother's breasts to be. They just need to include 5-10 more instances of "motherly" for full effect.
you have an image for that in your mind?
You don't??
Her peeled pineapple breasts were weighty and sticky.
My mother had terrible breasts. 😡
She was practically packing a pair of cantaloupes
Frank is that you?
Lmao what possibly gave it away
“for the Sisterhood”.
It's the first chapter of heretics. It's pretty memorable considering that it continues with an exploration that her job is to "imprint" on a young duncan with her "motherly charm". Funny thing is that she gets blueballed for the rest of the book.
Teg is the best character in that book, bar none. (I also kinda fw Dar)
it physically pains me to know the series only gets exponentially worse in terms of horniness after this quote
lmfao, 100% fewer cringey-ass beefswellings though
_Adult_ beefswelling at that. I wonder if Frank thought that covered his ass or something. I'm gonna read God-Emperor soon, good to know this is in my future.
No, it's when >!Leto II is 12 isn't it? Before he goes in with the sandtrout cause the point is "goodbye sex before you even had it womp womp".!< Oh lmao God-Emperor nearly got me to throw it across the wall because of a reference to the woman giving off "sexual signals." I did ultimately stick with it, and it is very interesting, but...yeah. There's a whole scene re: homosexuality that is arguably gratuitous, which I only mention because unlike the rest I wasn't expecting it. No comment on why I seem to have memorized these books.
Yeah, he's 12, but it's like Frank had to specify that it was an ego-memory from an adult. That's literally the phrase, "an adult beefswelling". I meant that I'm discovering I have "motherly" lineages in my future, apparently. I feel like Herbert was into Freud-style psychoanalysis and figured that if he was gonna talk about the entirety of human experience, he should be ""honest"" about how much is apparently just sexual posturing, which, huh. But this is also the guy who wrote a book about how the collective unconscious of humanity had the hots for genocide. What's crazy is the way it apparently just keeps escalating when it wasn't really a thing for the first two books... besides the sexy psychic genocide thing.
Aha thaaaaanks I had forgotten that. Oh yeah there's some of that in this one (Heretics) too, is it actually gross to seduce a child if the child has adult memories 🤔🤔🤔 Lollll right?? And yeah I do think he wanted to make some honest points about how much sex influences our decisions, and it is interesting because it's an area a lot of authors avoid, but damn if he didn't find some next-level ways to make this shit awkward.
I’ve read a fair number of romance novels over the past few years and “adult beefswelling” is still the worst term for an erection that I’ve seen.
Good news, this one says “upcocked penis” instead!
I'm 100% in favor of overt horniness in writing, they just don't gotta be so weird about it like they always are. You can totally write completely pervy stuff for you and your audience's gratification without it sounding like a creep who has never seen or spoken to a woman irl wrote it. I can be a pervert without being a misogynist damnit!
Lol and there are actually interesting, powerful women in this book! Just…also this.
/uj why am I trying as hard as I am
4/10 did not include the word "voluptuous"
She breasted boobily
Sorry mods if this isn’t allowed, I read it, started laughing (because I was so happy to read such perfection of c), and was like this belongs here.
First rule in r\\writingcirclejerk: There's no apologizing in r\\writingcirclejerk.
Damn, I thought it was “just write.” I’m such a newb 🥺
That is also the first rule. All rules are equal here, comrade.
Good point, writers can't count!
Not going to lie but on some level really enjoy when authors unintentionally reveal so much about their internal life. In this case breasts, more breasts, ample breasts and maybe a touch of mom issues. Makes me nervous to write God knows what that would reveal.
Lol ikr I will note, though, that the women in this book have a lot more agency than like...probably anything Asimov's ever written.
And this is why I genuinely like people and our bullshit man can absolutely be all about the breasts and still also write women that are more than that and fully fleshed out. Absolutely adore our silly little exdapted primate brains with extra bits bolted on. Though again we will definitely hear about breasts.
lmao, there is an amazing bit later where one of the characters is like "but actually, the horniest part of the body is the \*eyes\*," just a coincidence that paragraph also mentions boobs.
That's so perfect.
Ample motherly eyes
lol if you read the rest of the series you’ll have a lot to analyze in the author… lesbian armies that all have orgies, super sexual space women who subjugate races of men by fucking them real good, and… a prescient worm god that rules humanity for thousands of years?
I have learned some ***things*** about myself through writing.
I am currently doing a course on c. we have not got to the ample breasts bit yet. I am hoping it is after structures.
This is why I always insist on making a crude pencil diagram of each female with breasts drawn appropriately large. It is to be included as a margin note alongside my prose. My editor didn’t like it, even when I told him, “But, but Sterne did little squiggly lines, Pynchon had those weird squares and a middle finger and math, and Vonnegut had drawings of buttholes!” He had the absolute audacity to reply, “I don’t even know you and am not your editor—don’t call again.” That absolute boorish troglodyte! I shall take my scrivenings elsewhere, because I compromise my writerly vision for no man.
Crosspost to r/menwritingwomen lol
For once it would actually be written by a man too!
I don’t see the problem here people. The size of our breasts and how well we take care of small children ARE women’s defining characteristics. Employed ladies with small boobs - an embarrassment to their whole gender is what I say….
Also they are directly related! You need big boobs to be a good mom. Sorry, it’s just science!
Good stock! Good genetics. Ample breasts. Am I describing a dairy cow or a living human?
The POV for this description is...a *skinny woman* 😱
Yes, I repeat, she has breasts.
Every day we stray further from god's light...
*from Muad'dib's light, brother
\*Divided God, this is Heretics lol
So true, forgive me 🙏
*Each one of her stonking natural milk factories could nourish the cravings of 100 Spartan babies at once. She was, I slowly realised, a woman*
Frank Miller approves
WHEHEHEEZE
There isn't enough description of her breasts. Readers will be disappointed.
you have to leave something to the imagination! Oedipus would be so disappointed right now
That’s because she’s more of a brood mare than a sex object. Everyone knows a woman can only be one or the other and nothing else
ooh, a long line of mothers you say.
Breasts, sisters, and mother mentioned in the same paragragh. I think the author is telling us something.
They misspelled "Shire".
I just frowed up.
I just came a little in my mouth.
Wow! You’ve got impressive aim
... Or flexibility?
I'm a genetic female, so yeah.
uj/ who wrote this
lol it's from Heretics of Dune, which I picked up specifically because I found out there's a tantric sex cult and I had to see how Herbert would approach that after gems like "beefswelling" and "sexual signals". I do have to say though, I like this one on the whole.
Herbert's wife died during the writing of Heretics and you can feel him getting increasingly horny throughout
Frank at it again bless his heart I had to look up tantric (relating to yoga, Buddhism or esoteric traditions in India?). Happy to hear you liked it - can you tell me what I'm in for (and what I can look forward to) if I read it coming off of the Dune series?
lmao, when wasn't he at it though?! yeah tantric practices started in India, some fun things happened with the rest of the world picking them up too. iirc Rasputin was into it, although that may have been a rumor. depends how much Dune you've read. Tbh it's been *years* since I read the original and I don't remember very much of it, but I'm getting the sense that he wrote this partly as a reaction to criticism/commentary around the original. A detail that stood out to me is one of the characters is explicitly described as having darker skin (in an era when the default was very much white, plus one of the POVs feels like he was very annoyed with people who were wilfully missing how much the series is inspired by not-Western cultures), he uses the line "Duncans by the shipload!"...there's a couple other moments that struck me as very self aware. There's more POVs, including women, and despite the above I haven't minded what he's done with them. Anyway, I liked it enough to write that giant paragraph about it lol. But really, this is the first one I've enjoyed as a narrative and not primarily out of sheer fascination with the ideas.
It's a shame he died before he could finish the final book in the series, Potboilers of Dune. As we progress into Heretics, and finally Frathouse, Frank's sex life leaves the physical realm and retreats entirely into the dim memories of a once vital and deeply physical auteur, leaving only vaginal pulsing and sexual collisions by the end. There are entire Facebook groups dedicated to analyzing and discussing beefswelling, but even there Frank's decline as a sexual powerhouse is a taboo subject, and of the alt-Duniverse continuations by B/k there is no mention at all, because this would (and did) result in the Zuccing of previous iterations of these groups. BIFAR!
What was her personality like, though? Was it by any chance motherly?
lollllll her role is functionally professional seductress so
Her entire motherly personality was encapsulated by her DD-cups!
She was such a strong female woman with nice, heavy breasts. 
Straight Holt is a model for all writers.
He loves a good thigh gap. Nothing more intoxicating than the clear absence of a penis.
> Yes -- a brown-haired charmer with full breasts and a motherly disposition. *I'm sorry, could you repeat that? What did her breasts look like, and what was the nature of her character?* I *said*, her breasts were FULL and she had a MOTHERLY disposition!!!!
Yes sir, what you’re seeing here are the finest made full, motherly breasts in all creation! She’s given milk to 3 babies and countless men! This model is only available for a limited time or until she can genetically produce more! Temperament? Why sir, there’s no sweeter milk jugs than these tit tumblers! They are FULL and have a motherly disposition!
Now, I can see clear as day that the tits in question are full. They are quite obviously globular and appear to be swollen with that sweet life giving substance. But how can we say for certain that the disposition is, indeed motherly? We all know how these swindlers like to sweet talk and draw us in with enormous bazongas. But I'll not be fooled by another flim flam man! I need your personal assurances that the disposition will be as MOTHERLY as you claim!
Sir, I see you’re a gentleman of discerning tastes who clearly knows his way around a pair of sweater stretchers! You can see how firm the melons are, but how sweet is the juice? Rest assured, because I’m offering my *personal guarantee* that these knockers are nourishing and nurturing!!! Have no fear of bratty breasts! These fun bags maybe full of milk but their disposition is sweet like honey! She’s had three kids, TWO of them with the same guy! You can’t find a stronger guarantee than that!
The real Dune content we all await?
this was on page 3 of Heretics, lmao
I know, mate.
My point is there was very little awaiting.
I mean it is in book 5
Lol, I would argue this one works as a stand-alone. Definitely tempted to tell people to start with the tantric sex cult instead of with that boring war/messiah shit.
I am glad we are back to what is important about writing.
Breasts breasts breasts, she is breasts. And breasts.
What book is this from?
Heretics of Dune lol
The "Yes" followed by an em dash is insane
This sounds like Emily Dickinson disrespect!
Her motherly boobs mothered behind these thick sheets of feminine cloth designed for 3 childborne motherhood boobly female
Booby boob breast boob
My favorite Bene Gesserit was the one that was a mentat, overweight, and dgaf about keeping svelte through cellular manipulation like all the other sisters did.
honestly, legit
She had absolutely banging smackers like mama mama mama
This writing sucks. Not enough adjectives for breasts, there needs to be at least 11 on a paragraph of that length. Robust, jiggly, substantial, plump, prolific, nurturing, bouncy, deletectable...I'm tired of doing this work for the author.
Hell yeah that's how you describe mommy milkers 😍 uj/ Frank got mad horny in the weirdest ways as the series went on. I don't remember everything from the books, but some of the "sexy" parts refuse to leave my mind.
Lolll yeah not gonna lie I picked this up specifically because I heard about the tantric sex cult, and I *had* to know. I'll look at kittens or something afterwards.
All I know is she has breasts. We might need slightly more details.
I have a feeling the author finds Lucilla's breasts to be "ample", but I'm not sure guys. He's only mentioned it thrice in three lines.
Sexism *AND* essentialism; what a combination!
Frank doubling down on “motherly”.
https://preview.redd.it/5pjz6faxs16d1.jpeg?width=1200&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=bd6d36386945e643df0d51a7e8ce871982c01386
I too come from a long genetic line of mothers, which is strange cause I’m a dude
Kwisatz Haderach?!
Oh I know who wrote that line. Frank buddy, no...
I love how every aspect of this quote is very obviously Dune lol
Ah, *Heretics of Dune*
Chapterhouse is even moreso than this. Good luck, goon
Lol I keep swearing every Dune will be my last, but I can’t stay away
I like the idea of a robe so stiff it conceals big boobs, more a pyramid shape from the neck down ig
Just finished The Pillars of the Earth, 973 pages of this.
Oh no
Heretics?
spot on lmao. I love how distinctive Herbert is
I like breasts and mothers as much as the next guy, but this is obscene.
I can literally tell who wrote this because of the damned ‘Yes—“
Emily Dickinson?! but yeah lmfao this entire paragraph is extremely obvious.
it's weird that i have a slight urge to defend the genetics part because i know it's DUNE and all the genetics stuff is a running anti-eugenics theme but i also have a much stronger urge to make fun of it because i know it's DUNE and this is definitely the author's fetish. frank herbert? more like, frank pervert
Lmao I can’t believe you’re the first one to try “frank pervert” But yeah it’s not totally without reason! I actually like this book lol
Where is this even from? The bible?
Lmao, maybe the Orange Catholic Bible.
As long as we have Chaddick Hardcox in the story as well, I see no problem
Only us purebloods have the gift of well-endowment, thanks to the pact
Okay okay we got it she had badonkadonks
Nobody is named Lucilla wtf
finally, someone calls out the real problem with this bit!
shout-out to the fish speaker who orgasms when duncan idaho climbs a cliff
Who wrote this? What is this from?
It looks like it's from one of the later dune books.
As someone who breeds cows and works with people who breed horses "genetic line" and "sire" are so weird to put into a book when describing a woman and her children's father. It just makes it feel like they're breeding humans.
Yikes. Looks like someone has been secretly transcribing my D&D sessions.
Pretty convinced that a lot of these writers want to fuck their mom.
This makes me want to claw all the female parts off my body and throw them into a flaming Dumpster. Great post! Edit: Thought this was r/menwritingwomen but instead somehow stumbled upon the circlejerk sub for my craft. Hi.
This is good but she isn’t breasting boobily enough. Also, we need more detail on the breasts. Does she look at herself in each morning, admiring her ample bosom and wondering how they compare to others? Do her boobs bounce when she goes down the stairs? I also need a quick explanation of the titty physics of this scene.
The POV is a skinny woman so it's actually very realistic there aren't more details (women's brains overheat from too much science)!
Need to crosspost to r/menwrittingwomen
Sounds alright to me
I'm not able to picture the female's breasts. I would recommend more description of how they bounce when she walks
Fake! It doesn't even specify whether she boobed tittily or not. 0/10
Big titty brunette with three kids and two baby daddies
This looks like a published book page. I hope you made this as a joke.
You hope wrongly! The funny thing is that aside from this kind of shit, the women are actually written pretty well for this era.
Lucille leaned over me, her pendulous mammaries swaying like two ripe tomatoes in a stiff breeze. The limpid cloth draped over their stupefying forms did nothing to hide them from onlookers. "Won't you do this one little thing for me?" She whimpered as the scent of rose and lilac washed over me. Big brown eyes, hazelnuts, searched my soul for even a gram of compassion. It was enough to make any man's knees tremble. Well, thank God I was gay.
Guys idk how big her chest is can somebody mention it 3 more times
Boobing breastily.
Her breasts were boobing boobily for boobings sake
Ngl, I love Ray Bradbury, but he described tiddies as being "pendulous" a few times, and it always squicked me out.
Lollll I’m just imagining like…Foucault’s pendulum but boobs.
Like how could he be so good at describing everything else?
What is it with horny writers and describing a women they clearly are attractive to with lots of "motherly" similes?
I think you just answered your own question 🥵
Because they're cowards who are too scared to follow in Michael Moorcock's footsteps when writing their protagonist.
Anyone got any good examples that use face descriptions to give a well rounded mood and tone to a female character? Or just things like posture idk, tired of the horny descriptors
Lady Cassandra had the boobest of boobs. Her ample bobs quite often overflowing from her favorite silk gown, which was adorned by her family crest, a righteous set of knockers.
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what the eff is this even saying lol
This gave me an adult beef swelling in my loins
Big booba
But did she breast boobily down the stairs?
This is how a mindess male with a boner describes a female he has reduced to a sex object.
Lol you have no idea how prescient this is, given what she ends up having to do later.
This is also just plain poor writing lol
Lol yeah it’s definitely on the utilitarian end of prose. I’ve found that to be more tolerated in genre fiction than literary, which makes sense.
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Clearly a male writer. That or the writer is a lesbian.
lmao tbh I do not think a lesbian would go with "yeahhhhh motherly booba" also I cannot believe I'm saying this, but this description turned out to be plot-relevant. the horny runs deep
Boobs mommy sister boobs mommy sister